Lauren Van Solkema
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Pentad:
Who: I can’t come up with a certain person in particular,
but this writing sounds as if it would come from someone who wants to dance but
can’t. They read about it in books and want to feel the emotion of dancing
gracefully, but they just stand there awkwardly watching others perform it. So
their movement is awkward and anything but graceful. They must’ve done a lot of
research on dancing and wanting to fit in with the dancers so their attitude is
good when they’re alone, but in the dance studio they become negative and has a
little sense of morality from this negative side. We do sympathize for the
speaker because they are just trying to fit in a new culture for them (dance
culture) and it isn’t working out. We’ve all tried to fit in before and
sometimes it’s hard.
Why: This person wants to break out of their ordinary life
of reading novels about dance and wants to live it. They’re just having a
really hard time with it and have some confidence issues (about fitting in).
Society thinks they’re dumb for taking a chance.
Scene: This person is in a lobby of a dance studio watching
the last class of the night. The dancers don’t notice that the person is there,
watching. This was at night and the main character of this text wanted to dance
but didn’t know how to get involved and felt incredibly awkward so they ended
up at a dance studio.
Agency: very informal. It’s a monologue. The technique if
just it being scattered and not understandable.
Persona: I think Lee did a good job representing what
someone feels like if they don’t feel included or feel awkward. This text
showed that person thinking what would make them feel better. Also, the way how
it’s written (by being so incoherent) added affect to how that person was
feeling: incoherent and alone and no one understanding them.
Literary devices: Personification- tear flowers (wanted
crying flowers the way they wanted to cry).
Mode of aesthetic communication: dramatic because I think it’s
a conflict of how the person doesn’t know what their identity is: a dancer or
something else and they can’t figure it out. It made it even more dramatic how
the person is confused and the words are jumbled because it adds emphasis on
how confused they are.
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